Need Poem in Hebrew, Who can help?

Smiles ↓

Sun, Sep 25 2011, 3:09 pm

My husband's sister is getting married and we won't be able to attend her wedding because the wedding is in Israel and we live in NY. I'm expecting a baby and due that time. I want to send a card for my mil, fil and the kallah I'll have someone give it to them at the wedding. Problem is I don't begin to know how to write in hebrew let alone a poem. Can anyone help me here? I want something that will leave an impact when they read it so even though we won't be there physically our presence should be felt somehow from the far. I have someone that is leaving tomorrow to Israel and she is willing to take it for me. Thanks in advance!

singleagain ↓

Sun, Sep 25 2011, 11:20 pm

pretty short deadline...

what's the general message you want to get across...

also, can you write an english poem? if you can, it'd be easier to translate the ideas, then to come up with something from scratch...

actually any ideas of what you want it to say, would be helpful

(also did you have a thought of length >?)

↑ Smiles

Mon, Sep 26 2011, 4:40 pm

I know it was a pretty short deadline. She left to Israel already but I can get someone else to take it.

I'm thinking of a 6-8 line poem. Something short and to the point.

And the basics, wishing them a mazal tov with lots of bracha etc... maybe something about building a bayis na'eman byisroel... And also something like even though we are not there are hearts and thoughts are there with full of joy.. Sorry about my ramble, I'm just trying to get all my thoughts out.

Thanks Loads

↑ singleagain

Wed, Sep 28 2011, 4:20 am

the more ramble the easier...

I am working this out as best I can. but I might not get to you till after rosh hashanna, so I do apologize --- hold off on that, brain is working

Isn't it a miracle, what a tremendous Bracaha,
that Hashem has filled out lives with much Simcha
Your brother, my husband, has a growing family
And you my dear, [insert kallah name] are starting down the same journey
Although we can't travel, your are always in my heart
Your parents must shep nachas, the same way I do
I know they are happy, as happy as we, and they are also proud
Of the daughter that they raised, sweet, nice, loving, fun, smart and brave
An Aishet Chayil, a Kallah, taking a step into the future with your lucky husband to be
After the wedding, I can't wait hear, how [kallah and chatan's names] are build their bais nemon b'yisrael
If all the young couples took to marriage like you, there would be more joy in the world, and many more smiles too
to be in eretz yisroel, breath in the air and soak in the sun
may you be an example for each and every nefesh

ok, so english first, and you get to tell me, if you like it , want any changes, and then I will translate it, with lots of help from my mother who, baruch hashem speaks very fluent hebrew ...... also, can I have the chatan and kallah's name, it might rhyme better with some of the words, (you can pm it to me, if you prefer)

also, I wish to send a message of my own, if that is alright...