Intimate Relationship

amother

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 12:44 pm

I'm in
an intimate
relationship
right now.

It's deep.
It's incredible.
It's intense.

It engulfs me
Overwhelms me
Terrifies me.

There's no
way out
of this
relationship.

It holds
me captive.
Doesn't
let go.
Drives
me insane.

My intimate
relationship
with
PAIN
is too close
for comfort.

It is
suffocating.
It is
agonizing.
It is
core
slashing.

I'm way
too deep
into the
relationship
to
withdraw
to stand
up
for myself.

I'm held
captive
within
me.

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:12 pm

amother is on a roll

I want to write about each of ur topics but im at work
AHHHHHHH

just wait.....

amother

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:15 pm

I've never posted in the writing club forum before, do people post constructive critism or questions or just positive feedback? I don't want to offend anyone....

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:18 pm

well back when we started, people would add their own writings on the same topics
give critique if the person asked for it
give applause if they liked it
ask questions
maybe you want to pick a code name to sign with so we know that all the writing comes from you?

go back and read the first two threads.

"I wanna start a writing clun. u in?

and

I dare u not to look

and ull get a better idea

u write beautifully!!!

amother

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:23 pm

Just to clarify, the second amother post was not from the original poster. sorry for the confusion.

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:25 pm

amother wrote:

Just to clarify, the second amother post was not from the original poster. sorry for the confusion.

thanks for clarifying Wink

feel free to pick a code name here so we know which amother is writing what. and so that we avoid confusion.

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:33 pm

intimate relationship

was it just physical
was it just emotional

was it ever
was it ever

was I anything
was I something

was I me
was I real

where were you
where are you

pain
alone
neglect
silence
anger
avoid
ignore

a tear

and now so much space
no one to appease
not a soul in the way
alone in my space

searching
calm
peace
free
dream
breathe

still a tear

the world's best mom

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:37 pm

robynm wrote:

I love it! I was curious to see what you would write on this topic, and I expected something bitter and depressing, but this is great.

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:39 pm

BITTER AND DEPRESSING????

me???!!!?? Rolling Eyes

c'mon?? now disect what I wrote

and im waiting to see what u write

the world's best mom

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:41 pm

Bitter and depressing only because you are divorced, not because you're a bitter person.

I have no ideas of what to write on this topic so you may have to wait a very long time before your curiosity is satasfied.

the world's best mom

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 1:44 pm

And I see no need to disect your poem. I think it does a great job describing a persons feelings after divorce and their coming to terms with it. And that "Still a tear" adds a lot. It shows that even after a person "gets over" their divorce and moves on with life, that sadness is always still there.

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 2:06 pm

coming out in the open
even though I shouldnt
felt that thrill
did the unimagineable
shhh
dont tell

its been so long
in truth
thats a lie
more recent than not
shhh
dont tell

unlike anything else
utterly exciting
against the rules
total newness
shhh
dont tell

no name
no emotion
just to feel
for the first time
shhh
dont tell

I call this poem one night stand

the world's best mom

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 2:11 pm

Well, I sure hope this one is not true! Wink

But it's a well written poem.

amother

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 2:15 pm

robynm, OP here. You write really well. I enjoy the way it flows..... but what exactly do you mean by 'coming out in the open'?

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 2:18 pm

I guess its my way of announcing it to the world
does that make sense?

and amother I love ur writing!!
did u come up with a code name?

amother

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 11:32 pm

I couldn't, I lied.

Not true.

I missed him.
I wished he
Would know.

It was over.
I was breaking.
I broke.

Now only me.

I lie in the dark,
Waiting, wanting.

He is no longer here.

Only me.
Alone.

Does he know?
Does he miss me?
Doesn't matter.

It's over.
Finnished.
Gone.

robynm

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 11:37 pm

amother wrote:

my god amother
im reading this and I want to cry out in pain
I could have written this....

I would ask u to explain... but the amother fact gives me the feeling that u wouldnt want to explain

any chance you would pm me?

amother

Wed, Mar 23 2011, 11:43 pm

A relationship,
So intense.

And yet,
'Twas doomed.

Physical pleasure,
Could not,
Would not,
Sustain us two.

He left,
I mourned.

I mourned,
As I had,
Every two,
Weeks.

For a physical relationship,
Is no relationship.

To connect
Means more
Than just the thrill
Of lovers.

It means,
To love,
When in the daylight,
Without the covers.

To have him give,
Without the touch.

Was the one thing
She could not go on without.

So when he left,
She mourned,
She cried,
And yes she knew that it was good.