Shattered Glass serial in Mishpacha

Posted: Mon, Apr 12 2010, 6:04 pm Post subject:

[quote="Mama Bear"]I am still upset, although Riva explained why, why the story's plot TOTALLY changed midway into something rather cliche (mother and son and daughter in law stuff) instead of the real, heartwrenching original story. which was solved without a real solution. people dont 'come back to the derech' so easily. usually such couples get divorced. which is what huvi and betzalel shouldve done many chapters ago.[/quote(agree)
Hello, Riva
I love your stories and your style of writing. I enjoyed every minute of Green Fences.Every character reminded me of somebody I know that is exactly as the ones in the story. When you started Shattered Glass it seemed like you outdid yourself. Although,eye opening, I couldn't wait for the next issue!!! As soon as those(may I say "few") vocal fanatics made all that noise, the story became really blase'....Please , tell us how the story was really supposed to be...please...(we won't tell anybody)

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Posted: Mon, Apr 12 2010, 7:07 pm Post subject:

No, first of all I don't like frum suspense stories and secondly I don't like it when stories jump between two eras or plot lines every three paragraphs. In general, I think that two (or three or four) plot lines running through a story is a literary device that is very overused in frum writing.

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that is so very true & I'm really not that fond of it.

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I like the yair weinstock story but only the one that's set in modern times. I'm barely following the one in ancient times. etka gitel does a much better job with historical fiction Smile

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oh I LOVE when there is a will! I wonder how that will work out.
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write on, if you are still reading, is there any way we can read the original story online or something? Id pay for it! Is it written or was it just an idea in your mind?

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The new story is off to a promising start.

Posted: Sun, Apr 18 2010, 6:32 am Post subject:

Which new story?

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chava, thats the problem. They ALL start off promising, grab us and get us interested and than the contravesial topics arise along with the outcry and letters and all of a sudden the plot changes so much that you can't tell its the same story.

truthfully, I'm suprrised that mishpacha hasn't realized that this happens every time and tries for a tamer topic to start with. Unless they davka want the outcry and letters, maybe its good advertising for the story.

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what new story?

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Hi Everyone! I'm running so can't reply individually, but regarding the real story for Shattered Glass, I need to see if I can/will reveal it at some point. I will try to do what is right--from as many perspectives as possible.

To the person who commented on the disruption of controversial plots, we honestly thought we would be okay since we had strong rabbinic backing, but we underestimated. That's how it goes sometimes. What I CAN tell you is...that I have the most AWESOME plot in mind for the next serial story, be"H. And the best part is that it's not controversial, just very suspenseful and real. Stay tuned!! Smile

And I'm glad you like Behind the Veil. I like it too!

Best,
Riva

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what is behind the veil? I got this week's mishpacha & I have no idea what that is.

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Sorry - I got my threads mixed up. There is a new Etka Gittel Schwartz story in Bina.

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To quell all your curiosity, Behind the Veil is a serial by Riva Pomerantz in Talking Points, a Lakewood publication. Nice plot. Forget the divorcing like in Green Fences this one's taking it a step ahead-breaking engagements...

Sorry for those of you that are losing out!
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