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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 1:01 am Post subject: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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I don't know if we'll ever beat cystic fibrosis
And I don't know if amor vincit omnia
And I don't know where to find you
But
Clap for Tinkerbell, clap, do you believe in fairies?
Oh yes, I hear laughter in the stars and the wind,
Laughter in the meowing of cats curled up content,
Too lazy to move, little furry tractors,
Woolen motors vibrating on my legs;
In the smell and crinkle of a new book
Waiting seductively, covered, full of intention;
Laughter in the wind that whistles in our old windowpanes,
Creaky, drafty, darn you cold wind, but in the whistling
Mischievous laughter.
Shall I write of your love for Stephen King or nailpolish?
Shall I go on helplessly about your beauty?
Shall I re-read your Russian, English, muscular, angry words,
Full of intent, full of caresses?
Shall I remember you when I hear "Sixty-five roses"?
Shall I snuggle my cats?
Shall I sink back in fear from rage at Hashem?
Clap for Tinkerbell, clap, do you believe in fairies?
Oh yes, oh yes. _________________ We must love one another or die.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 1:06 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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That's beautiful. Would you like to share the background? _________________ "Don't sweat the petty things, and don't pet the sweaty things!!" - Steven Tyler

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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 1:12 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| It's so sad. Your poem is beautiful
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 1:21 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| I hope no one will be reluctant to critique it because of the subject matter.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 1:27 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| Quote: | | Shall I re-read your Russian, English, muscular, angry words, |
My favorite line.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 2:53 am Post subject: Re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| sequoia wrote: | I don't know if we'll ever beat cystic fibrosis
And I don't know if amor vincit omnia
And I don't know where to find you
But
Clap for Tinkerbell, clap, do you believe in fairies?
Oh yes, I hear laughter in the stars and the wind,
Laughter in the meowing of cats curled up content,
Too lazy to move, little furry tractors,
Woolen motors vibrating on my legs;
In the smell and crinkle of a new book
Waiting seductively, covered, full of intention;
Laughter in the wind that whistles in our old windowpanes,
Creaky, drafty, darn you cold wind, but in the whistling
Mischievous laughter.
Shall I write of your love for Stephen King or nailpolish?
Shall I go on helplessly about your beauty?
Shall I re-read your Russian, English, muscular, angry words,
Full of intent, full of caresses?
Shall I remember you when I hear "Sixty-five roses"?
Shall I snuggle my cats?
Shall I sink back in fear from rage at Hashem?
Clap for Tinkerbell, clap, do you believe in fairies?
Oh yes, oh yes. |
The usage of "Clap for Tinkerbell, clap, do you believe in fairies" in the beginning and end, gave me a feeling as if I am walking into a magical place. It created such a strong setting and I felt a strong rhythm throughout each line. It was really magical.
I'm not a great writer but I treasure the times I am moved by a written piece.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 3:34 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| Thank you.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 3:59 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| Incredible writing, powerful imagery, covering a range of emotions. And ending with hope.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 10:17 am Post subject: Re: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| merelyme wrote: | | Incredible writing, powerful imagery, covering a range of emotions. And ending with hope. | This.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 10:33 am Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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I got goosebumps. So profound. _________________ Live the life you want to live. Be the person you want to remember. Make decisions. Make mistakes. If you failed, at least you tried.
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I don't claim to know everything, nor do I think my opinion rules. It's just that - an opinion.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 3:30 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| Thank you comrades.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 3:33 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| This is beautiful.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 19 2012, 4:22 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| seqouia, that is a beautiful very well-written piece.
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Posted: Wed, Jan 25 2012, 4:57 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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I said "oh," out loud, like someone punched me.
It hit me, from your heart to mine.
Beautiful. _________________ "We don't have kids. We raise them."
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Posted: Thu, Jan 26 2012, 3:42 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| Your feedback means a lot to me.
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Posted: Thu, Jan 26 2012, 4:12 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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The Poem is beautiful , I LOVE all the cat references . Its hard to lose a dear friend ,I lost a very close one back in august (she never told me she was terminally sick so that I would not be sad during my pregnancy and pp )
I wish I had your talent to honor her memory with such profound words.  _________________
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Posted: Thu, Jan 26 2012, 4:16 pm Post subject: re: To Ella, wherever I may find her |
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| I reread your poem every time the topic pops up. Even the title moves me every time. I hope that you and her family will find comfort.
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